[evergreen-outreach] version 3

[Jennifer Weston]

Rogan, it looks great -- another Herculean effort!

Pulling Andrea's notes from review of v2.0 forward -- and adding my notes
after another review
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P. 1 - recommend substituting the pull quote with a heading like "A message
from the Board President", since the pull quote duplicates the first
sentence.  I like Andrea's original suggestion for "A message from the
Board President" rather than "A message from the board's present." but
that's just a personal preference.

P. 3 - I believe Chris Burton is no longer at NFPL as of April and he now
works for the City of Niagara Falls. I guess we should say "Chris Burton,
*former* Technology Coordinator"
For the identification under the pictures, now that both have left their
respective organizations, I would suggest removing "Formerly of" from
Irene's picture to just leave it as "NC Cardinal" -- that's where she was
when the Spotlight announcement was made and the subsequent text covers it.
Ditto for Chris.

P. 4 - first paragraph, last sentence typo "ninty-four videos" should be
"ninety-four"
Second paragraph, typo, "annual ack-A-Ways,"   *(though ack-A-Way might
catch on)*
Third & Fourth paragraphs -- *rewrite suggestion forthcoming -- later on
Monday, unless somebody beats me to it*

P. 7 - *Interest Groups** -- Would you like for me to cut down some of the
text or is that more trouble than it is worth at this point?*

"*CWG *meets" -- should be "Cat IG" -- very, very nitpicky but we use "Cat
IG" instead of "CAT IG"  because CAT isn't an acronym (just an abbrev.)

P. 11 - "Link, Shulamit" -- might be better as Shulamit Link?  Shula signs
her emails as "Shula Link" so that should be fine to use here.

Spellcheck names remaining from Andrea's notes: No hyphen for Andrea Buntz
Neiman; correct Debbie's last name to *Luchenbill*

Another nitpick: if you're going to center the bottom two lines, make more
of a space between them and the preceding matter.  Also maybe fiddle a bit
so "year" isn't all by itself.  agreed


Jennifer Weston, MLIS
Product and Education Specialist
Equinox Open Library Initiative
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