[evergreen-outreach] proofing copy three

[Garry Collum]

It's looking good.


I found one error.


P 11. Middle column.  The word Evergreen is cut-off.  "We started the process of migrating to Ein December 2012."

Garry

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From: evergreen-outreach <evergreen-outreach-bounces at list.evergreen-ils.org> on behalf of Ruth Frasur <director at hagerstownlibrary.org>
Sent: Wednesday, April 11, 2018 3:14 PM
To: Rogan Hamby
Cc: evergreen-outreach at list.evergreen-ils.org
Subject: Re: [evergreen-outreach] proofing copy three

My comments are as follows, and with deep recognition that you've been working a LOT and this makes me feel nit picky.
1.  There seem to be a lot of fonts.  I wouldn't say it's weirdness, but a lot.  Most notably, to my mind, are the two text areas on the last page.  My eye expected them to be what seems to be the standard san serif font throughout, but it's not.
2.  The logo on the back page seems like it's a little close on the left hand side.
3.  On page 9, there are essentially 6 colors ranging from green-blue to fluorescent green.  That's a lot of green.  Grant, we're Evergreen.
4.  The headers on pages 7 & 8 are off.  The text seems too close to the horizontal edge.  On pg. 8, too close to the vertical edge.
5.  The Kentucky collage on pg. 6 is awesome.
6.  On the acknowledgements page, everyone else is a proofreader but I'm proofreading.
7.  On the center teal bar on the acknowledgements page, the white text is off vertical center.

Enough nit picking for me.  I didn't notice any glaring grammatical or spelling errors.

On Wed, Apr 11, 2018 at 2:54 PM, Rogan Hamby <rogan.hamby at gmail.com<mailto:rogan.hamby at gmail.com>> wrote:
OK, clearly I missed my self imposed deadline of 2 pm.  There was enough feedback that I couldn't get it all in plus the things I noticed.  But thanks to the wonders of modern technology and mobile hotspots on phones I've continued to plug away at it.

All of this is relevant because with my laptop screen but without additional monitors so it's hard to jump between all the additional windows to track font changes and such but I _think_ I've gotten the fonts standardized.  Another pass will be needed.  If you still see font weirdness please don't hesitate to say something.  How Scribus handles fonts .... well, let's just say it's not intuitive.  I have unkind adjectives in mind but it is at least consistent so I can work around it even if it makes absolutely no sense why it's doing it in the first place.  And I'm thinking the manual editing of the XML I did at the beginning may be needed again.  Anyway....

I'm still finding some small layout tweaks.  You may notice them.  I haven't logged them as everyone else has been so kind to do.

Uh..... I have a lot of thoughts but time is short and I don't remember most of them.  But I think all the changes are in.  I do however want to highlight something that has been driving me nuts and that Andrea mentioned: kerning.

I think some of the text flows look ... not good.  Scribus does not have smart kerning like InDesign or Quark or ... other modern commercial software layout tools.  For the most part Scribus has been decent but when it fails it really fails.  We could just justify everything to both sides like a newspaper but that would look just as bad just different.  The thing about kerning is that it's time consuming to do manually and small text changes can make it all mute so I'm not going to tackle it until I feel sure text changes aren't incoming and even then I'm not sure I'll have time to really go through it all.

That will be tomorrow.

 Proofing copy 3 is attached.

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